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I have a feeling that this category is meant to be taken seriously as a written essay or thoughts on poetry in general. My regular readers will know that I’m a great lover of this Art and write a fair bit myself. Lately I have been looking on poetry sites and dabbling in a few new forms of poetry. This is a great way to widen your knowledge and maybe even find a style that suits you perfectly. I write mostly rhyming poetry by choice, but I have tried my hand at Haiku and found the concept challenging.
Recently I have used a workshop on one of my favourite sites to dabble in, “Forward Press”. I’m not going into details of the site, I would prefer to review it at my leisure, but have mentioned the name as the following terms are from the site.
♣ Tanka.♣
A Tanka is a Japanese verse form consisting of five lines with a syllable count of {5,7,5,7,7.} Imagery is important when constructing a Tanka, but it doesn’t need to be as obscure as a Haiku.
Simile “””””””
A simile is a comparison that uses some linking words (like, as, such, how) to make the likeness clear. A simile generally sounds more casual and less emphatic than a metaphor, providing a physical bridge linking two things. This is the challenge of Tanka and I’m using a poem from the mentioned site to give a better idea of this.
Envious ocean 5 Like a mirror that reflects 7 Her sister the sky. 5 But broken and distorted 7 As she cannot fly so free. 7
I had a few problems with this as I wanted feedback on my attempts and the examples had to be of sea, sky or both. The following four are the ones I have sent to the site.
Dark clouds brooding low Presaging wings of the storm Tipped with lurid light. Like a hovering eagle Before the prey is sighted.
Calm the still water Little ripples break and sigh Like the breath of wind When nature’s fury dies Echoed in dawn-tinted sky.
The moon rides the night Like black stallion gallops But tosses its head Clouds pass in frenzied dances As the sky claims its domain.
Surf breaks on the shore A wind whipped ice cream topping Battering the rocks Eroding across the years As sandpaper scours wooden toys.
I liked this medium so much I tried one with my own topic.
The treacherous heart Strikes with the speed of a snake It’s venom to sting Like a poisonous flower Wan beauty withers and dies.
Now I decided to try another one, much more simplistic, although it is more difficult to explain.
♣ Triolet ♣
Pronounced tree-o-lay originated in France in the 13th century and is usually short and witty. The Triolet consists of eight lines and two rhymes. The 4th and 7th lines are a repeat of the first line. The 8th line is a repeat of the second line. Confused?
1 A (first line) 2 B (Second line). 3. a rhymes with 1st line 4. A Identical to 1st line. 5. a rhymes with 1st line. 6. b rhymes with 2nd line. 7. A identical to 1st line. 8. B identical to 2nd line.
Since I decided not to send these in I had my freedom to use my imagination. None are great poetry, but I had a lot of fun with these.
Spring Returns. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
The winter winds are waning and spring is on its way Hearts are lighter, evenings longer, welcome back the sun. In the fields new life is born, lambs are out to play. The winter winds are waning and spring is on its way. Bulbs soon bud and break the earth daffodils hold sway Sweet the smell of fragrant flowers now winters on the run. The winter winds are waning and spring is on its way, Hearts are lighter evenings longer welcome back the sun.
The Fishing Fleet ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
All along the waterfront fishing boats bob and dip The tide is in, bright sails unfurled soon the fish will run. Weather-beaten fishermen haul tackle prepare the ship All along the waterfront fishing boats bob and dip. Nets are loaded, now’s the time to hope the fish will nip With a cheery wave the fleet now turns to face the rising sun. All along the waterfront fishing boats bob and dip The tide is in, bright sails unfurled soon the fish will run.
Snow Hope ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Snowflakes swirl, the air grows cold, children laugh with glee Will it settle on blizzard born when morning comes around? Noses pressed against the window, now we wait and see Snowflakes swirl, the air grows cold, children laugh with glee. Oh to build a snowman “please mum” they make a plea, “The snow is deeper can we play when it covers all the ground?” Snowflakes swirl, the air grows cold, children laugh with glee Will it settle on blizzard born when morning comes around?
Well that’s my contribution, I could have gone on longer but I won’t outstay my welcome. Both of these poetry terms are ones I have never heard of. I think they both set a good challenge, although I imagine most people would find the second easier. One pointer here is to remember to use a simple word at the end as you have to get it to rhyme and it needs to flow.
I’m not setting a challenge but would be interested to see the result if anyone tries these. Once again, thanks for reading. Lisa.
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I personally enjoy writing all different styles of poetry, although ive never heard of a triolet. I may try this one day soon :)
Good piece of work
Thank you :)
buffymad3420 01.01.2007 15:11
Loved reading this!
yamcam 15.03.2005 19:43
Some lovely examples...To hard for me to do....Angie x
Advantages: This is poetry that sings. TS Eliot was a master of the language. Disadvantages: Eliot was often purposely obscure, showing off his education
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