Poetry

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Passage of Time, The Demise of the Devine?

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2 Aug 26th, 2003 

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Just sittin my exams so will be back in a few weeks!!! Have a good day!! :D lesley xx

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Ok here is the entry in my won challenge- the one to create a poem containing the words- GENESIS, BERRY, YARD, ENERGY and PENGUIN. I hope you like my poor attempt.

It took great energy,
Life’s genesis-
Caused Gods great lethargy.

Give an inch they take a yard,
The concerned angels sang-
When the earth was marred.

The apple on the tree,
Of knowledge so divine-
Was just the first curiosity.

Of little miracles,
Like the little penguin-
Humans are quizzical.

Now we eat all the fruit,
Bananas, mangos cherries and berries-
So our own trumpets we can toot.

Is it freewill,
Earths destruction?
Or is God just over the hill?

Now you have read mine
i hope you take time
to write your own
Let your talents be shown!!

i know there are many good writers out there- so come on don;t be shy give it a try. let me know by droppin a note in my guestbook!! take care and have fun :D lesley


 

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emilyo 16.04.2004 23:17

Great poem honey - well done, Em XX

kimking 17.09.2003 18:54

Im not much good at poetry. kim.x

rosierose 07.09.2003 01:36

I wont being trying this as poetry isn't my thing.



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