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Community Level 4maz2909

maz2909

By the light of the moon

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"...letting other people read some fiction that I have written so apreciate all comments good and bad! Sarah shot bolt upright in bed, this was the fourth night in a row she had been woken up by her teenage daughter Katie screaming in her sleep. Sarah got out of bed and hurried down the hall to her daughter's room. "No, please stop, leave me alone, someone help me, please please SOMEONE HELP ME!!!!" The screams were getting louder as Sarah sprinted ..." Read review
06.03.2006

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Snowed In (review 150)

AdvantagesThoughtful piece of writing about what living alone can be like

DisadvantagesIt's a bit dull

"When I reached review 100, I wrote about my experience in a bout of snow. So this time, I will try my hand at something fictional. Enjoy. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ==Snowed In== The New Year had barely settled in when the snow storms came. Warning after warning had been broadcast, until people were convinced it would never really happen. Now Lucy leaned ..." Read review
30.01.2013

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Community Level 6l-m-n-o-p

l-m-n-o-p

The Good, the Bad, and the Crispy Review with images

AdvantagesIt's fun to make fun of George Bush

DisadvantagesHe could sue me or something...

"This is a satirical piece that I have written for my English coursework, and I felt I would share it with you, since I know that so many of you must enjoy a good laugh at George Bush. I hope you like it... Cast your mind back to the January of 2002, and what do you remember? Monumental events that shook the world? Or perhaps President George W Bush choking on that most difficult of snacks to swallow, a small, crispy pretzel? After being omitted ..." Read review
18.10.2005

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Community Level 1codebluebe...

codebluebelle

Sweetest Perfection

AdvantagesI got an A* for this

DisadvantagesThis is quite long (it was 9 short chapters)

"I entered this as coursework at school - it would have gotten full marks if it hadn't been 9000 words over the limit. Be warned, this story deals with homosexuality (no flamers please). This was originally a band fic, but you don't have to read it with that in mind. Sweetest Perfection What a night. A triumphant return by all means. The funny thing about the scene is that you make friends only so that you can crush them more successfully. The ..." Read review
19.01.2005

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Swan Love - A 17 Year Love Story Review with images

AdvantagesThe truth behind Dempseys Swan encounters

DisadvantagesHe is a danger to anyone.

"Swan Love is a tale of love spanning 17 years. This piece has one slightly adult section set during 2002 as a result I would suggest the reading of this is for adults only. After recently realising the vision that Dempsey has of me I felt it only fair to let you all know the truth about him. A swan can live for up to 30 years though a normal lifespan for a swan is just 12 years. Delia's passion for love kept her alive for 20 years. Delia knew ..." Read review
08.04.2006

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Community Level 3Shaoon

Shaoon

Therapy for the Recently Deceased

AdvantagesI may actually finish writing this

DisadvantagesIt might not be any good anyway

"...editted to remove my written work sorry for the inconvenience. ...editted to remove my written work sorry for the inconvenience. ...editted to remove my written work sorry for the inconvenience. ...editted to remove my written work sorry for the inconvenience. ...editted to remove my written work sorry for the inconvenience. ...editted to remove my written work sorry for the inconvenience. ...editted to remove my written work sorry for the ..." Read review
31.08.2004

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The beach

AdvantagesMy first attempt at a story since school

DisadvantagesI hope it works

"I lie on my perfect beach staring at an unblemished blue sky unmarked by cloud or plane. The only sound I hear as I close my eyes is the crash of the surf as it hits the coral reef that guards my island paradise before gently lapping the beach at my feet. A slight breeze arises to caress my face before continuing its journey rustling the palm trees that stand as sentries along the edge of my beach, onwards and once more flowing out to sea. Another ..." Read review
06.09.2004

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Community Level 3steffiw

steffiw

I love you to death

AdvantagesUmmmm

DisadvantagesUmmm

"From the moment he entered the bedroom she could tell he was horribly drunk. The unstable but arrogant swagger, the stupid grin making his handsome face look dissolute, the wave of fumes that hit her as he weaved his way past the bed. She’d been worried sick ever since he’d stormed out earlier that evening. He’d been spoiling for a fight but she wouldn’t give him one, so he’d driven off in a huff. Hours later he was back, roaring drunk, swearing and ..." Read review
26.10.2004

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Community Level 1hardwoody

hardwoody

The escape

Advantagesgood

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"The escape Faster, faster I run. Never looking behind, there on to me! "Get that skum". Cold air draining my energy. Braches ripping my face, but that what spot me, not from them anyway. Through the cold, crystal river. I'm on a roll, but then I fall, fall hard and strong. Down I go, never to see light again. I try to get up, it's to late they have me I'm doomed. A bat comes down on my face. Now in here in a grooty little cage waiting to die. ..." Read review
30.11.2006

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Community Level 2Simply_Sen...

Simply_Sensual

Teach me to love (something sensual)

Advantagestempting

Disadvantagesnot everyones cup of tea

"The heat of the sun bearing down upon her back warmed her as she lay basking in its rays. As her toes raked the sand she thought back to the golden hair that had flowed through her finger tips. It had been a wonderful day. ***** On what should have been Laura’s last day teaching, what she often described as a hoard of delinquents, Laura actually found herself committing to yet another years contractual teaching nightmare and all on a spur ..." Read review
05.09.2004

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Community Level 4Nikova

Nikova

From the outside looking in.

AdvantagesHopefully it will make you think.

DisadvantagesMight be a tad dark and broody.

"**EDIT** After re-reading this i decided to remove the bits saying i hoped you enjoyed reading it as it's not something that people enjoy reading about, but it makes you think. ****************************************************************** Writing is something i do to unwind, my house is full of scribblings of what i perceive as my thoughts and feelings, noone as yet has read my work apart from my angels poem but that was easy to write, i ..." Read review
08.11.2006

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The Omajinaakoos

AdvantagesA monster mystery is always quite captivating, isn't it?

DisadvantagesThe Big Trout Monster is probably just some washed up otter or something...

"'''So, what is it about?''' To all who read this, I should probably add a description of what my short story is about before you launch into it.. I have been a lover of writing short stories and poetry for many years now, and am still at the level where I keep constantly striving to write something better, I always find faults in my work and this one is no exception, but it is my favourite story that I have written based on real events (well, loosely ..." Read review
07.02.2011

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Community Level 2CarlyJade90

CarlyJade90

The Outsider

AdvantagesWas my first attempt, and only attempt ever!

DisadvantagesWrote when i was 15 Years old!!! Lol. (Bit rubbish)

"...over to my favourite section, Fiction - D. I flicked through. Charles Dickens. I picked up a few of his books and walked over to a table. A lady looked up at me, quickly picked up her book and handbag and hurried off. ‘Yup! Looks like you’ve still got the charm there Larry my friend,’ I joked to myself under my breath. I sat down and started to read. My watch beeped, a few people turned around and looked at me. It was 3:37 which meant I had 23 minutes ..." Read review
16.08.2007

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Community Level 5drewish

drewish

Retirement Home

AdvantagesFuturistic sci-fi (if you are into that sort of thing)

DisadvantagesWarning: Dark humour

"Electricity flows, waking up the inhabitant of his glass prison. George's sight isn't what it used to be. He coughs slightly at the mustiness of the glass dome, despite him having had plenty of time to get used to it. Dutifully, he goes through the motions once again. The throaty tones of George's voice are amplified to make it easier to hear. Despite this, however, the people surrounding the inconspicuous marble plinth have to listen closely to ..." Read review
30.11.2004

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Community Level 3Timi_Hendrix

Timi_Hendrix

The Boat to Camberley-Hey

AdvantagesA homage to that region of the soul we call America

DisadvantagesA homage to that region of the soul we call America

"==Introduction== This is my first semi-serious attempt to write a short story. In it, I have created a dystopian blend of crass corporate culture and what I hope is disturbing, unconscious imagery. I hope you enjoy the piece and I'd be very grateful for any critical feedback. Thanks for reading, Tim. ==The Boat to Camberley-Hey== It was smarg o’clock in the morning and Wills, Pete, Bonesy and me had just finished the first Structured Discussion ..." Read review
25.10.2009

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