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Michelle and the Wedding

AdvantagesAn interesting read, I hope

DisadvantagesIt's pretty sad....

"Michelle stood up and stretched her arms. She had been drifting in and out of consciousness in the way only a working man - or woman - could. Spending most of her days tap-tap-tapping away on a keyboard had taken it's toll on her, and her attention span was now at the point where she spent most of the afternoon doing the open-eyed sleep that most office workers have perfected. She snapped out of it in time to see the computer clock flick to 5:10. "Damn" ..." Read review
13.12.2006

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The Dilemma

AdvantagesIt gave you something to read for a few minutes

DisadvantagesYou may have wasted those minutes.

"...that made me laugh, and stories my father told based on them that would help me sleep. Mother stroking my hair and whispering things to make me feel safe after the bad dreams they sometimes caused. The days before the mine closed. Children would smile too sometimes. Even laugh, I noticed. My adoptive parents were kind people, and I couldn’t see them spill tears because of me, and then there was my older ‘brother’. He had taught me to shave, shared ..." Read review
18.09.2004

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VickyVickster's Sexy Sixty Nine!

AdvantagesThis is my 69th review.

DisadvantagesNow that would be telling!

"This is a fictional piece written to be teasing, tempting and a little sexy. It does include sexual imagery but does not include strong language. If you are sensitive to sexual content, don't read on but if you enjoy a bit of a tease or you enjoy a good Mills&Boon read on! A Fruitful Life. ------------------- I was in a rush. I was always in a rush back then. I leapt onto the train just before the doors whooshed shut. The whole carriage was full. ..." Read review
18.08.2004

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WRITER'S BLOCK

AdvantagesA cathartic experience for me!

DisadvantagesI'm sure you'll tell me!

"...I scribbled constantly, writing short stories for magazines, to eke out the pitiful maintenance I'd wrung out of my philandering ex-husband who told all his girlfriends I didn't understand him (he was right, I didn't). The worst of the torment hotted up one morning as I saw Kevin (and very nearly Houdini the budgie) off to school. How that bird could see wearing a hood in which he resembled a bank robber, heaven only knows. Kevin had fashioned ..." Read review
15.05.2005

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marmiladey

A Silent Witness.

AdvantagesA new Challenge .

DisadvantagesNew territory.

"I have toyed with this idea, I am unsure as to how it will come together. The challenge has been accepted so I will begin ..... comments cheerfully recieved. She stood, arms clasped around her body. Her breathing erratic. Silent tears coursing down over her face. Her nightie damp, bathed in sweat, - cold now. Her hair tousled, the nape of her neck damp, cloaked in the moist tendrils of her shoulder length auburn hair. The fear in her mind subsiding, ..." Read review
08.10.2004

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The Futility of War

AdvantagesThe Beach went down so well I thought I would try another one

DisadvantagesWhat do you mean you haven't read The Beach

"It is quiet this morning nothing moves and there is no sound in the early morning sun, a sun whose rays are dispersed by a light early morning mist that is gently rolling over the fields along the valley floor. I sit and look down the valley. My vantage high on this grassy bank at the head of the valley is above the mist and I watch as the heat of the sun slowly burns it off to reveal the valley floor. The sight that now greets my eyes is one of ..." Read review
07.09.2004

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Ade

AdvantagesInteresting story methinks. Some degree of humour

DisadvantagesNOT recommended reading if you don't like profanities. Not my best work either

" Darkness was closing in fast. The days and nights had somehow slipped by quickly despite the current events that had passed recently. Jim sat quietly in his study, a single table lamp being the only source of light. It was clear he was deep in thought, barely blinking as he lifted a glass of whisky to his dry lips and taking the tiniest of sips imaginable. He was both sad and relieved that the day was nearly over. The funeral had been today. Jim ..." Read review
07.10.2004

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CHRISTMAS ROSES

AdvantagesIt's seasonal !

Disadvantagesit's not particularly cheerful !

"Black roses for my faithless love who left on Christmas Day No word , no time , no warning sign , he simply turned away I'd waited in the morning with my love-struck eyes aglow And never thought on Christmas Eve my love would treat me so Red roses he had given me a few short hours before I'd placed the scented scarlet blooms beside the bedroom door Imagined my love smiling as he offered me a ring So unprepared for misery that Christmas Day ..." Read review
19.12.2005

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Snow White

AdvantagesI'm very proud of this

Disadvantagesit's a tad long

" Julia, or Jules as she was better known as, curled up on her beanbag, and flicked open the photo album she found under her bed. It was the time she went to Paris with her parents 4 years ago. That was a good holiday-they went before Christmas and came back on Christmas Eve. She turned the page, and a little glimmer of pain came across her face. The photo causing the pain was a year later-on Christmas morning. That was the last photo ever taken ..." Read review
18.08.2004

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Unfinished Business

AdvantagesYou may enjoy reading it

DisadvantagesMy first story

"...papers". I have heard stories about reincarnation, people coming back becouse they feel they have unfinished business or they were not ready to die.. "I am very sorry to hear about your husband" Mary said "But I don't think.. "I blamed myself" the woman interupted her. "The man who killed my husband.. he was my lover..I tried to end it..he was cought and executed but I have never been able to live with myself. "Could I talk to him before you leave?" ..." Read review
27.09.2004

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Story_Weaver

Facing Death....A Short Story

AdvantagesNone, if you die

DisadvantagesIt may hurt

"We crawled on our bellies through the inky blackness along the narrow landing, feeling our way. The searing heating of Satan’s breath was pinning us to the floor. Stan, my partner, nudged my boot to tell me he was having to retreat for a moment. Obviously the heavy hose we were dragging had become entangled in yet another invisible tentacle. This was fortunate, as I had to move a large object that was blocking our way. I wrestle with the large plastic ..." Read review
17.07.2004

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Henry, where are you?

AdvantagesThere is a twist in the tale

DisadvantagesNone

"The light in the room had suddenly turned very dim, Sally looked across to the window the sky had gone dark and threatening "A storm on the way," she told herself, "better get the washing in, hope Henry isn't too long I don't want him caught up in the storm." As she gathered in the washing she felt the first drops of rain hit her and heard a distant roll of thunder. Sally quickly picked up the laundry basket dropping the pegs into the bag and made ..." Read review
18.11.2004

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Come Ride With Me...

AdvantagesYou'll probably guess the ending...

Disadvantages...again you'll probably guess the ending

"Leanne left the club at 3.30. She was hot and sticky and somewhat frustrated. She'd had yet another bad week at work and had gone out tonight with the sole intention of pulling a guy and having a wild night. Unfortunately for her, all the male losers in the club opted to pull all the other female losers around. She was wearing her best pulling gear - a very low cut baby pink chiffon sleeveless blouse, a delicate see-through pink shawl which barely ..." Read review
20.07.2005

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Marandina

The Devil and The Deep Blue

AdvantagesSee op

DisadvantagesSee op

"Just now and gain we can all pretend to be writers, can’t we? I know folks like their product reviews but here is a brief departure from the torrent of commercialism on Ciao. I hope it doesn’t take too much of your time up and any comments welcomed, of course. It’s a bit raw and ripe for a re-write but as a story it seems to work. Thanks in advance assuming you’ve stuck around. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It ..." Read review
17.02.2004

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The Betrayal

AdvantagesFirst attempt at fiction

DisadvantagesI'm a bit scared

"It was the first time Sandra had been out since the death of her ex-husband Pete and she was not really looking forward to it, but the girls at her new workplace had insisted. Although she did not know them too well, they all seemed like a nice bunch, friendly and full of fun. They were meeting in a posh wine bar in the town centre, Sandra recognised the name as one Pete used to frequent, but she had never been herself. After checking in her coat ..." Read review
01.08.2004

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